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    Jazz club in Monroe

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    The following was written as a part of an application for a small-business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.
    "A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."
    Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

    In this argument author concludes that a jazz music club will be successful in Monroe because this genre of music is popular there and the closest jazz club is about 65 miles away.

    The argument is not entirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.

    First, the argument assumes that Monroe is a good place for a jazz club because over 100,000 people come last summer to the festival which takes place in the city annually, but it lacks of the statistics. Such big attendance can be caused by a single circumstance and couldn’t be repeated. So, statistics for the previous years should be provided.

    Secondly, the argument never provides which part of $1000 is spent in jazz clubs annually. Only general number is provided without any details, which can be not connected with the music club business. Moreover, the statistic provided for whole world, but to get a loan it should be specified for a location where the business will be established.

    Finally, the argument omits some major information about Monroe city. How big the city? How many people live there? Without this information some arguments will be too weak to support this idea to get credit. For instance, if it’s big city with a lot of people living there then at 7 P.M. people could be in traffic jams and, taking into account that jazz is unbrace music, they would listen it to relax. Which means, that popularity of the radio station program isn’t connected with feature popularity of the music club.

    Thus, the argument is not completely sound. Ultimately, the argument might have been strengthened by providing more statistics, details and some important information about city.

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